Okay, now I liked that one.

I mean... If I had no pride, I could choose, after reading this, to devote myself to your writing and openly say that this snipplet is one of the best, most fantastique, enlightning, beautifully told and dreamy piece of writing I ever came across, amongst both fanfiction and litterature - but, sadly for you, I have my pride, and I won't actually say that...

I do dislike it when people smash words all together a little like you did a couple of times. It DOES make an interesting effect, but the grammar and syntax Jeanne in me goes wincing. It's nice in poetry, but I prefer when people keep it out of prose.

But your writing in this was totally perfect, connecting all sorts of different elements and mixing them into a dream... Not so an original idea, but I didn't conceive it was possible to render it so well.

And, on the other hand, I do like it when writing gets vague and meaningful, with big, almost metaphysical metaphors, that mean almost nothing concretely, but that when you put them all together sounds like that little something that makes science-fiction so much more daring than any other form of writing. i.e.
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(...) like the memory of driftwood and the jerk of Elsewhere between space and reality.

The second sentence of the first paragraph is equally delicious, and, also, when the dreams progress and pull everything together, with the church and the singing, and the ocean, and the little bit of a story that's in the dream itself relating to the wings. And when you write that he wakes up with his arms feeling like March and September, which is totally a priceless piece of pure style and threatens to make me go in a state of contemplative beatitude.

It's also very fit to the whole portrayal of the character of Liam Kincaid - and it's somewhat extraordinary when a writer comes up with something that has both great style and at least some meaning.

I think you just expressed a lot of the big everything writers seek for at some point... Saying that THIS has power, like Karen so accurately put it some time ago.

I'm not kidding Kimmy. This is incredible. There are no words to say how much of a mute-handed writer you make me feel like right now.

I am like... loving this.