Mhe. I've only read separate pieces of Dune - I think I read the fourth and fifth book, or something like it. So... I'm not able to judge your characters, but the writing is good and the introspection seems nice. Very well-done vignette.

Thanks!

I have only read the first Dune book but I have never read neither Dune Messiah or Children of Dune - so this piece is entirely based on what they portrayed in the movies - and I wrote this piece based entirely off of Part One of the movie version of The Children of Dune because I really didn't care for Parts 2 or 3...

Anyway, thank you!